Sunday, June 15, 2014

The Novel Draft (Version 2)

The reader reads these words, while this draft is provided to be published in one of the three countries of Malta, South Africa and New Zealand.
Story:
A child whose parents are dead is adapted by a kind-hearted family. The father of the family who also had a tattoo on his body has a good relationship with the little girl (stepchild). But he abuses this friendly relationship and sexually abuses the little girl. While the man was the child's first friend and also the only friend, until then!
Like the first draft's story, the element of fear has particularly been focused in a way that the reader feels that the author has put the world on fear. So the man is placed in the role of the commander and the girl who has seen the situation to be out of control, was not able to oppose and was following him.
As the daughter of the family notified the incident, attempted to shot his father and runs away with the little girl. The mother character of the family was not an influencing character in the story. From this point onward the daughter is also in pursuit because of killing her father and has to live as a runner. In the rest of the story, the relationship of the girl with her boyfriend is narrated. Features of her boyfriend are described as: tall, rich, emotionally with immature and inappropriate behavior. (The author's conclusion of this character was pretty negative). At the end, they break up. The breaking up of these two from each other is in the form of, "forgetting the relationship". The erotic point of the story begins when the girl gets acquainted with someone who is involved in an erotic game; a game that can be money-making for this girl. The girl also needs money to provide the little girl and her own economic need enters the game.
In this game, the girl has to follow the sexual and even thought requests of her (non-sexual) partner; requests which are sometimes deviant but then she has become more important than the others. In the continuation of the story, this girl begins a deep and emotional relationship with one of the girls in this game. And in the end the girl becomes rich!
Criticism:
The story of this novel either in characterizations or even in its events is much like the movie "About Cherry". In this film, Cherry accepts a job in pornography to fund the costs for the treatment of her sister. Even the characteristics of Cherry's boyfriend are the same as the characteristics of the boy described in the story and also at the end of the movie, after disrupting her relationship with her boy friend; Cherry becomes roommate with a lesbian woman who also recently separated from her partner. It is like a homosexual relationship, which the hero of this story begins with one of the prostitute of the game.
Another thing that can be said about the story is that sex has been claimed to be a woman's value and a sign of maturity and independence. As an opponent I should say that getting married soon (and as others say, becoming a woman) and having children in third world such as destitute African countries, Afghanistan and Pakistan, for traditional women who are often deprived of education, is also a valuable sign of maturity! In this story it has been tried to display a humanist and curious face of a prostitute who is hero. But finally, despite the incentive which caused the hero to kill her father, it means maintaining the child's environment health, she begins an emotional relationship with a prostitute girl and actually steals the child's environment health; because despite the hero, this prostitute girl has chosen prostitution; and she has not become a prostitute because of supporting another person and things like this. Therefore, whether such a prostitute will not threaten child's environment health?!
In other hand the story draws a positive image of the illegal sex industry.

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